I’ve been an epic pendulum of highs and lows this week (wow, was that redundant?) And not able to blog about much of anything. I got some good writing done…I went and read some of my old writing and almost cried at the first chapter and how much work it needed. Then I read the second, wondered if I could completely cut the first, and felt much better.
So, since my skull has no more ideas for writing about writing, and because I’m starting my NaNo prep today, my question for y’all is…would you read further? Be honest; frosting will only make my ego chubby.
The frantic jackhammer of consciousness knocked on Elle’s skull, insisting she wake up. She forced her eyes open, cringing at the feeling of sweat and tear dampened sheets clinging to her flesh.
Sun spiked through the curtains, sending daggers of light across her bed and spilling into her unwilling eyes. She groaned and pulled the covers over her head, trying to block out the world. A giant stone gnawed at her gut, dull teeth chewing through the tender lining. She wondered if having that last shot of tequila had been a bad idea.
She realized the pounding was external. Someone was at the door. Talking to strangers last time had gotten her into this. The reminder of Casey tugged at her, threatening tears. Uninterested in greeting whomever it was, she snuggled further under the blankets, not caring that the heat stifled her.
“Uriel.” A familiar voice drifted through metal and fabric, bringing a hint of comfort with it.
Forcing herself to stand, she took a deep breath and smoothed out her hair. She hoped her makeup wasn’t smeared across her cheeks as she opened the door for Lucifer.
His expression shifted to one of concern when he saw her. “Are you okay, Kiddo?”
She struggled to force a smile to her lips and stepped aside. “I’ll live. Do you want to come in? You can experience my fabulous ghetto lifestyle first hand.”
While Uriel and Lucifer are common in certain stories, I do find the main character interesting. You even managed to make the first sentence grab attention even though it’s the character waking up. Nice.