It’s Friday, woo! I need Friday. I crave it. I ache for it and it permeates every fiber of my being. And in about 12 hours I’ll be able to enjoy it. Okay, maybe only 11 at this point.
And I was super-duper pleased to see yesterday that there was a blogfest today. This will save you all from my venom filled post about what makes a writer a writer, and allow me to share a brief snippet of my story ^_^
The concept here is kind of simple, but really cool, IMHO. Supposedly, page 99 in a manuscript can tell you a lot about the pace of a book. So below is my page 99, and if you’re not already familiar with today’s activity, you can follow the link above to get to everyone else’s. Here are the three things that you’re supposed to think about:
- Would you turn to page 100?
- Why or why not?
- Based on what you read, how likely would you buy the book?
I won’t give any background because then the questions above become less valid. Basically, if you picked up any book in the bookstore and flipped to page 99, would it compell you to read more/buy the book and why or why not?
(I was nervous about this, btw, because last time I tried it my page 99 fell flat. It just so happens today that my page 99 is one of my favorite scenes from my most recent revision)
Uriel’s Fall Exerpt
Ronnie felt Conner’s emotions shift in an instant. The tension of being around her vanished, most of his attention focusing on the new arrival. Most, but not all.
“Hey, Lexi.” He leaned back further. “This is Ronnie. She’s the boss’s little sister.”
Lexi looked her over with mild curiosity and disbelief. “She doesn’t look anything like him. That’s lucky.”
He sighed. “I didn’t mean Tony.”
Lexi paused for a minute, thinking. “Oh. OH! Ha!” She smirked. “I knew he was lying about being Lucifer The devil doesn’t have relatives.”
Ronnie giggled at the reaction, realizing Lexi probably had no idea she was the archangel’s daughter. She still had questions, though. She tried to get Conner’s attention again. “Tell me what you mean.”
“I’m sorry, cute stuff, but he has to get back to work.” Lexi stood, tugging Conner to his feet. “But I’ll tell you whatever you want to hear if you spring for a bottle of champagne.”
Ronnie started to reach for her purse, wondering how much that would cost her and how much this woman did or didn’t know. That’s not what she meant.
“Lex, don’t.” Conner’s command was forceful, but the feeling behind it was half-hearted.
“Come on.” Lexi trailed a finger down his arm. “You know you’d give your right nut to see that.”
He smirked. “Without question. But that’s not my point.” He placed a hand on Ronnie’s arm, gaze focused on her. “Ask Loki about the name. Don’t tell him what I told you about the mark, though.”
Okay. “Okay.” She repeated the voice’s agreement, too confused to argue.
Conner looked up, gaze locking on something behind her. “Speak of the devil.”
Interesting premise, well written. I’d like to start at the beginning.
Wow- there is so much going on here (in the good way). I definitely need to start from the beginning to get a grip on this world!
It’s a good thing I don’t flip to random pages in order to decide on buying or not. lol
I am interested and would really like to know who is the main character. And of course, anything with Loki involved will grab my attention. This is why I don’t go to a beginning or end, characters I don’t know doing stuff I don’t understand. I look at the cover and read the back page, that is all. But I do like your 99 page. *winks*
This has potential and an other-worldly feel. I would turn the page. Thanks for sharing.
There’s so much going on here, and it all seems so important — I’d have to look at the back of the book to get an overview, and then I’d turn to page one hundred. That’s just a hazard of arriving in the middle of a scene.
I do want to know who this voice is in her head.
Thanks for sharing!
I’d like to know what happened before this. Lots going on. Great premise, though.
Michael
Wow, very interesting! Angels and Devils? Cool idea! I would totally continue reading! Thanks so much for stopping by to read my 99th page! Have a terrific day!
This is SOO clever! I want to know more about these characters–especially Lexi (she seems like a bad ass). Next page please! 🙂
IT’s very clever, but there’s a lot of characters on this page. I sure it makes sense if I read it from page one. I like the premise. Thanks for joining in the fun
Very interesting topic! I would want to read the beginning to catch up and see what’s what. Thanks for participating!
More, please? Is Lexi bad? At least sneaky? I would buy this book.
Marie, http://marierearden.blogspot.com
Like someone else said, here’s a reason why I don’t just pick up a book and flip to one random middle page without knowing anything else about it! I like the banter – shows the differences in voice/personality of the characters.
erica
Well I like it, she is either there kidnapped or she’s Lucifers daughter, as he was of course an arch. They are not playing devilish games with her so I have to assume she got some important free pass. I am so glad to see that Lucifer is not a taboo subject beings I have him in my series too and feared it would be one of those book burnin toe steppin deal breakers….Lol. I like and would keep reading this just from the random page.
The dialogue here is great! I got a sense of the place just from the interactions of the characters. But I was sort of confused. There’s a lot going on here. If I had started at page 1, it’d be clear though.
A very intriguing premise.
I’m super intrigued! Great dialogue and an interesting premise. I’d read on for sure!
Interesting! I would definitely go for this sort of story, beginning to end. I like the different mythologies that seem to be sprinkled even on this page, and the overal tone of the story.